Now, I will tell you about my three things I know to be true. When teacher said, "Today, our topic is about 'Three things I know to be true' ", I was little bit confused but then I understood what that means so I started to brainstorm. It was difficult to think about three things but I did it. So three things that I know to be true are I like dancing, I want to be a teacher, and I want to travel Europe.
First, I like dancing. I usually dance everyday and everytime in my room. When I dance, I dance with my friends or alone and I dance to K-POP dance songs. Dancing is one way to make me feel better.
Second, I want to be a teacher when I become an adult, because I want to teach students and help them to be great people. Also, before I become a teacher, I will create a way to teach students in different ways. I can't think about them now, but I will.
Finally, I want to travel Europe. I heard that Europe is wonderful place to travel. Also, I want to travel Europe because there are a lot of great relics or vestiges. In Greece, or some other countries, there are a lot of spetacles so I think it'll be a great time. Also, I will go to Europe with my friends when I am be a high school student. I hope that day will come soon.
The three things I know to be true are I like dancing, I want to be a teacher, and I want to travel Europe when I become a high school student.
These are the relics of Greece.
I'm sure that this three things will be true except the teacher one because when I grow up, my dream might change.
Overall, these are my three things I know to be true.
Hi Jeong Yoon,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing. I learned a lot about you from your post.
Some suggestions are to add more detail to your paragraph (tell us why, what, when etc.). Another suggestion is to put a space between the paragraphs. The conclusion is a summary of what you wrote so please make it more detailed.
Finally, I'm glad you used pictures but choose only 2 or 3 to use.
I look forward to reading more from you soon.
Thank you for your advices. I will try to fix them.
DeleteHi, I'm your writing TA Chanjung.
ReplyDeleteJust like you, I also want to travel Europe and actually planning to go there next summer. I hope you go there soon. As for your essay, I think the introduction paragraph is pretty well developed, but the problem is your body paragraph. Though you divided the main contents into 3 body paragraphs, each of them isn't quite elaborated enough. I suggest that you put some more details and explanations to help readers like me understand better. Also, try to write some more on the conclusion part.
Good Luck!!
Thank you. I will try to put more details.
DeleteThank you for you advices.